I subscribe to a lot of lists. One of which is a travel list in which the CEO of this company was talking about his trip to Vietnam. I'm fond of the company and his trip was really interesting. He had a section in there written which, I guess, was supposed to be funny. He ate something the locals said, "Is like your Spam" but later noticed there were no old dogs in the village. He said he got sick at the idea of eating dog (hey! I can relate!). I had to reply:
Thanks for an interesting story! Did you find the place you were looking for? It sounds like a real adventure. Best of luck to you! I am going to visit Vietnam some time in the future (maybe 7yrs from now?) and your photos as well as the writing are well done and inspiring. There's my compliment. Here comes a critique: I find it amusing/ironic you thought the dog spam was gross. Pigs and dogs are equally sentient and capable of suffering. Okay, that's my critique.
Think I should have said more, less, other? I'm trying to open my mouth and deliver messages of compassion and tolerance wherever I can, even if it's just a little email.
Right now, it's a bit abrupt. I wouldn't point out that you are going to critique, just transition to it. I don't know the story you're commenting on, so this is my uneducated edit of your text.
Thanks for an interesting story! Did you find the place you were looking for? I hope to visit Vietnam some time in the future. It sounds like a real adventure. Your photos and writing are well done and inspiring. However, I found your comments regarding dog spam to be ironic. Pigs and dogs are equally sentient and capable of suffering. Add another sentence or two here on the topic, then a closing statement.
Best of luck to you.
(your name here)
Don't take my punctuation, grammar, or spelling as 100% accurate, though. I draw stuff for a living ... and don't always get to practice perfect writing skills.