Needing help for writing answer about it why wool is not vegan

[Virpukka]

I try to write answer in other forum to someone who wants to know why wool is not vegan and I have problem, basically because English is not my native language and I would really appreciate if someone would help me with my answer so that I could get it done right that people who read it will understand what I mean. This is what I have written so far:

It's because sheeps are breeded to produce as much wool as they can what mean that they have more skin than the animal is big. That causes skin infections. Bugs can also live in those skin folds what that extra skin causes. It's not healthy because those bugs and others eat sheep skin or blood etc. It also makes shearing more difficult and because those owners usually have rush to shear the sheep when they just want to get the job done fast not caring if they hurt that sheep in the process.

Any corrections and suggestions are welcome.

[cowgirrlup]

I try to write answer in other forum to someone who wants to know why wool is not vegan and I have problem, basically because English is not my native language and I would really appreciate if someone would help me with my answer so that I could get it done right that people who read it will understand what I mean. This is what I have written so far:

It's because sheeps are breeded to produce as much wool as they can what mean that they have more skin than the animal is big. That causes skin infections. Bugs can also live in those skin folds what that extra skin causes. It's not healthy because those bugs and others eat sheep skin or blood etc. It also makes shearing more difficult and because those owners usually have rush to shear the sheep when they just want to get the job done fast not caring if they hurt that sheep in the process.

Any corrections and suggestions are welcome.

I had to look for an answer to this once that would really make sense to my SIL...I found this website and used it as my answer and my SIL understood it then...she is omni, but she really did understand it..there are probably lots of good answers, your answer is a really good answer, but if ya need more ammo..try this one:

http://www.vegsource.com/jo/qa/qawool.htm

bigg huggs to you !!

Karyn

[Virpukka]

Thanks, it helped a lot.

[cowgirrlup]

Thanks, it helped a lot.

Good, I was hoping it might help some...my friend told me she thinks this is a better source of info for that question...I read it and I have to agree, its very good:

http://brucefriedrich.org/Vegans_And_Wool.html

Personally, even before I was vegan I never wore it and as a child I always felt bad for the "cold naked sheep" :D

I still feel badly for them now.

huggs,
Karyn

[cstadt]

Wouldn't it be "the sheep are bred" rather than "sheeps are breeded"

[hoodedclawjen]

It's because (<- you don't need this bit, you can remove it) Sheeps (remove the 's' - 'sheep' is the plural of sheep!) are breeded bred to produce as much wool as they can, what which means that they have more skin than the animals is big should have for their size (makes sense, but isn't correct). That causes skin infections.

Bugs can also live in those skin folds what that that the extra skin causes. It's not healthy because those bugs and others eat sheep skin or blood cause the sheep pain and disease, (is a bit clearer)etc.

It also makes shearing more difficult, and because those the ('those' would be better if you were pointing at an owner) owners usually have <-(you don't need this word) rush to shear the sheep when , because they just want to get the job done fast not caring if (<- remove this bit), they often hurt that sheep in the process.




i've underlined words that could be changed, and added bolded words that you could use instead of them. i have also explained some parts that i thought could be changed, and said why.

your writing was totally understandable as it was though. :)

Sheep are bred to produce as much wool as they can, which means that they have more skin than the animals should have for their size. That causes skin infections.

Bugs can also live in those skin folds that the extra skin causes. It's not healthy because those bugs and others cause the sheep pain and disease, etc.

It also makes shearing more difficult, and because the owners usually rush to shear the sheep, because they just want to get the job done fast, they often hurt that sheep in the process.